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the U.S. Marine marching band performs in the 120th Tournament of Roses Parade on January 1, 2009, in Pasadena, California. Alberto E. Rodriguez/Getty Images
The Tournament of Roses Parade, held annually on New Year’s Day in Pasadena, California, is a world-renowned party featuring elaborate floral floats, marching bands, and equestrian units. The tradition began in 1890 when members of the Valley Hunt Club decided to decorate their carriages with flowers. Tournament of Roses Over time, the event evolved into the spectacular parade it is indeed today, attracting millions of spectators and a global television audience.
The U.S. marine Corps Band has been a frequent participant in the parade, representing the branch’s tradition of musical excellence and precision.U.S. Marine Corps Band Their performances add a patriotic and spirited element to the festivities.
Jennifer Vanasco edited this story.
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